Amazing work to catch so many quality fish and filming and editing is not easy so please don't take this as bashing, but I actually didn't make through either video.
I just find it boring to watch a guy with a rod in the air and reeling. You have some awesome sections with good action but too much "down time" so I didn't finish.
People have very short attention spans and they are even shorter online, they get bored for a second and boom off to the next video and you may have lost a customer.
I'm not saying this is anything special but its a video I did a few years back that I think gives the feeling of an exciting morning of salmon fishing:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nmrpr-KqPZkAction, action action that is what people want, trust me you will NEVER EVER lose a customer because you showed too many fish in your video.
Comb through your content and cherry pick out only exciting sections and string together a "story". Put some background music on it, only show people talking if it is extremely interesting and compelling and keep it short.
That's my 2.5 bits at least, others of course have a different opinion.